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I am writing a story which is pretty strange but is different... I don't want anyone to take it the wrong way as it is only a story and would like other's views and options...
The story is...

There is a girl who falls in love with her Cousin's husband.. this cousin is long related... But that girl does not say anything to the boy but the boy then tells her how he feels about her in some way and they both end up loving each other... this is true love and somehow shows that this was meant to be but they both don't know what to do??

Is there any ideas that what they could do ?? and what would the climax be??
It has to be a happy ending...

If there are any questions pls do ask i will answer them...

Once again pls don't take this personal its just a story i am trying to write for someone and need views and opinions on what could actually be done to make it better....

:)
 
If this story belongs to jat community,, that the only thing which comes in my mind is "ki yaa naash ki raahi hai",,,,, its the way to death:eek:,, I suggest them to take their steps back,,, because this is not the love its totally attraction,,, as he already married, so his love is only for his wife,,,

AND

If this story relates to any other community,, in that case also this is the story of totally unfaithfullness with ur partner,,,, both lovers ditched the innocent girl,,,, and there love can't be true,,, because true love never ditched anyone..

Note : My personal views,,, pls take lightly,,,:)

manishajhangu said:
I am writing a story which is pretty strange but is different... I don't want anyone to take it the wrong way as it is only a story and would like other's views and options...
The story is...

There is a girl who falls in love with her Cousin's husband.. this cousin is long related... But that girl does not say anything to the boy but the boy then tells her how he feels about her in some way and they both end up loving each other... this is true love and somehow shows that this was meant to be but they both don't know what to do??

Is there any ideas that what they could do ?? and what would the climax be??
It has to be a happy ending...

If there are any questions pls do ask i will answer them...

Once again pls don't take this personal its just a story i am trying to write for someone and need views and opinions on what could actually be done to make it better....

:)
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Simply Inconsistency !!!!!

:) This is simply a case of Inconsistency !!!!! """in my views""",when 1 is married-as said by Yash,i totally agree with him,he or she must b loyal to the partner in life.:o

After marriage,if 1 cant understand the dignity and sanctity of this divine realtion,then might b possible as u describing in ur story,that after sumtime this man or this girl will feel love(actually fascination) for some other person also.n that is totally an irresposible behaviour,
towards the life partner
towards the society
I never recommend that 1 should never fall in love,but plz keep in mind the moral duties also,as v all r here in the society(not blindly following --i recommend) ,this is for us,
if not, then wat would b the diffrence between Man and an Animal.:eek:
 
main ek baat kah rha ke ye dono to pagal ho re hai..... pyar ka matlab khushiya hai.... aur is story me keval problem hi problem hai.....
isiliye main kah ra hu ke in dono ko time rahte samjha do
 
yashbeniwal said:
If this story belongs to jat community,, that the only thing which comes in my mind is "ki yaa naash ki raahi hai",,,,, its the way to death:eek:,, I suggest them to take their steps back,,, because this is not the love its totally attraction,,, as he already married, so his love is only for his wife,,,

AND

If this story relates to any other community,, in that case also this is the story of totally unfaithfullness with ur partner,,,, both lovers ditched the innocent girl,,,, and there love can't be true,,, because true love never ditched anyone..

Note : My personal views,,, pls take lightly,,,:)
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Yes i can see where ur coming from but this is not from any community just a creation of God, ismeh bhagwan ki maarzi dikai jaathi hai aur baathaya jatha hai ke joh bhi hota ek vaja ke liye hota hai... Agar jis ke saath aap reh nahi sakthe tho uske saath puri zindagi kitni mushkil hogi...
This a type of film story which will be given to a producer but i want to make it natural and related to real life therefore im asking for opinions and ideas..

aap kethe ho ke its the way to death... either way it will be to death then cos they both can't live without each other... itna majboor ho ja tha hai unka pyaar kyu ke inka manah hai ke pyaar ishwar ki dehn hoti hai aur useh eseh nahi tukraya jata... infact they use it as a symbol...they feel as if they know each other for centuries... this is not just ordinary love but an extreme which people nowadays can't even imagine...

But Thank you for your time and opinion.... :)
 
rainuohlyan said:
:) This is simply a case of Inconsistency !!!!! """in my views""",when 1 is married-as said by Yash,i totally agree with him,he or she must b loyal to the partner in life.:o

After marriage,if 1 cant understand the dignity and sanctity of this divine realtion,then might b possible as u describing in ur story,that after sumtime this man or this girl will feel love(actually fascination) for some other person also.n that is totally an irresposible behaviour,
towards the life partner
towards the society
I never recommend that 1 should never fall in love,but plz keep in mind the moral duties also,as v all r here in the society(not blindly following --i recommend) ,this is for us,
if not, then wat would b the diffrence between Man and an Animal.:eek:
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Thank you for your opinion... yes i do understand what ur saying... but there love is something which not even society understands... thats the twist in this storyline... its not like nowadays how teenagers or kids think they are in love but at the end is only attraction... it is what we call true love in a deeper meaning... if one is in such case how is one meant to look at moral values and judge their love by respect... But would it be nice to keep the wife in the dark and not tell how someone feels about her or someone else? Relationship builds from the foundation of truth but if there isn't no truth or respect or trust in the relationship is it worth being in???
Its not only few years that u have to spend with your husband but a whole lifetime so would they be able to live after what has happend... after all god does something for a reason...

Well thank you for your time and opinion.... :)
 
harendratomar said:
main ek baat kah rha ke ye dono to pagal ho re hai..... pyar ka matlab khushiya hai.... aur is story me keval problem hi problem hai.....
isiliye main kah ra hu ke in dono ko time rahte samjha do
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Hi ... Ji sahi kaha aapne ke 'pyaar ka matlab khushian hai' par inke liye tho ek dujhe ko khush dekhna bhi khushian hai... isme sirf family ke saath problem hi problem ho sakthi hai par in dono ke relation mein tho khushian khushian hogi... Agar ye dono hat jaye... tho in theeno ki zindagi kabie normal nahi hogi... tho kya behtar hai ke sab ko andhere mein rak kar zindagi ek jhoote sahare pe jiye jaye ya sach ka samana kar ke sab ki zindagi ko ek nahya turn aur khushian vapas mil sakthi hai??

Well thank u for ur opinion and time... :)
 
Ek aur baath... in dono ke bache nahi hui hai... aur ek saal hua hai inke marriage ko...

Agar koi inki jaaga hota tho kya kartha??? kya is situation ka koi hal nahi hai? ke sabh khush ho sakthe hai?? ek time pe tho nahi lekin time tho har jeez ko lag saktha hai... par phir bhi aapne opinions ya ideas pls bathaye...

Thank you ....... :)
 
All relations of this sort husband-wife/lovers require faith/mutual trust/understanding of feelings/compassion and then love happens if these feeling aren't there then love can't happen/grow. The man who isn't faithful or trustworthy to his wife then how can he be faithful to a girl he feel he loves? It means both the boy and the girl are insensitive to their relative and SOCIETY. What if he/she feels same way again for the second time intheir life. If its LOVE then LET LOVE BE LOVE and move on with their life separately!
 
Hey Manisha,,

As per my opinion ,,, pyar tyag aur balidaan ka naam hota hai,,, lekin is story mein tyag aur balidan to kewal wife ko karna pad raha hai,,,, aur jo sacha pyar paane ki koshish kar rahe hai,,, woh ko kewal dusro ka balidan le rahe hai,,,
can u tell me whats the fault of this wife,,,, will she get love for her sacrifies????




manishajhangu said:
Ek aur baath... in dono ke bache nahi hui hai... aur ek saal hua hai inke marriage ko...

Agar koi inki jaaga hota tho kya kartha??? kya is situation ka koi hal nahi hai? ke sabh khush ho sakthe hai?? ek time pe tho nahi lekin time tho har jeez ko lag saktha hai... par phir bhi aapne opinions ya ideas pls bathaye...

Thank you ....... :)
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strange naa !! ya te eccentric story hai !!!

dear manisha ji,
FM radio pe breaktime main `sharma ji se poocho ` prog aata hai. isme surender sharma listeners ke questions ke jawaab apne andaaz main dete hain. i hope you know the humour poet surender sharma.
ek baar ek listener ne question poocha... ke sharma ji main ek ladki ko propose karna chahta hun.. par dar lagta hai , kahi vo gusse main aa ke chata na maar de. to kya main apne dost se ye kaam karva loon, isme koi khatra to nahi ???
surender sharma : bhai bilkul theek hai. agar gusse main chaata maaregi to dost ko lagega aur tum bach jaaoge. aur agar dost ka propose us ladki ne swikaar kar liya to ya sochna ke tum phir bach gaye... kyunki jo ladki aaj uska propose sweekaar kar sakti hai to vo tumhari hone ke baad kal bhi uska propose sweekaar kar sakti hai.
to madam jo ladka aaj apni patni se dagabaaji kar sakta hai to kya guarantee hai ke kal ko apni extra-marital girlfriend se dagabaaji nahi kar sakta.

i dont know much about likening, infatuation,fascination, obsession or love.
but for a healthy and succesful relationship there are four things required.... Touch, Taste , Truth, Tolerance. its a four T principle. If any two share all these T than they are compatible and bound to be attracted towards each other.
to kehne kaa matlab hai ke kasoor saara ladke ka hai had he been honest to aisa kuch hota hi nahi. aur kasoor us ladki kaa bhi hai, kyunki khuli aurat aur khula paisa dekh ke kisi ka bhi imaan dol jaata hai !!!!
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Hmmmm.... Lagti to kisi C grade hindi movie ki story hai ...

There is a girl who falls in love with her Cousin's husband.. this cousin is long related... But that girl does not say anything to the boy but the boy then tells her how he feels about her in some way and they both end up loving each other... this is true love and somehow shows that this was meant to be but they both don't know what to do??



True love kya hota hai !!! jo chhora apni biwi tai na nibha sakta (Note That :: Marriage is other name of commitment n working together to make that commitment persist)... istai bee na nibhawai ... baaki yah chhori baawli ai sai toh ke ker sakan saan ... Kahani ka end toh karna ai sai .. woh bee happy end huh ...Urai chhore ka ghana kasoor laagai sai ... us chhori nai door chala jaana chahiye aar ho sakai toh bhya ker le wah ... Time will help her to forget that idiot ...
 
Manisha ji,

it is a strange situation but these episodes are not uncommen in our indvidualistic society today.There are two sides to the story ie one is where love is the sole criterian to decide.In that situation a humanbeing should respect the feelings irrespective of the consequences but then again it happens only on Jupitor where there is no body to question that decision.Yes if someone can do that here on this planet as well,it is the will of the people[giving damn to society and own conscience of broader moral responsibilities towars former partener....which is really tough].All said and done there are people who are doing it today without a blink of eye lid.

Coming to the other side of the coin.here once a guy/girl have decided to tie the knot after taking all situations into consideration,it is immoral even to think of a relationship outside marriage.it then becomes a lust or greed to have more then one's share of cake and hence can not be termed LOVE in any sense of things.One ought to have control over one's emotions and never ending desires and should see reason and logic through the lense of wisdom,god has so wonderfully bestowed on all of us.We ought to be responsible and considerate to the feelings of the world around us.


In this world every third couple gets bored out of wedlock very soon and given a free choice by the society,no body will undertake the responsibilities of marriage seriously and this world will be a free place to wander.....with no restrictions of any kind......Should not we get frightened with the very thought of such possibilities.


Having said that,i am of the view that people are free to choose any of these options after proper stock taking and with a readyness to face the consequences.Good luck to all.



As regards to the solutions in this given sitution there can be a few as:

Solution 1: Terminate the existing marriage and go for the marriage with the girl he is in love[may not be easy as the lady already married may not easily consent to this arrangement as there is no fault of her.Also it will ruin her life specially if she is not well educated and financially not independent]

Solution 2: convince the new love girl that marrying her will invite a disaster and hence she should get married to some one else[It may be tough but has to be undertaken to save the existing marriage and the unbearable pains to the TRIO]

Solution 3: Though it may sound less practical but is possible.Convince both the ladies to co-exist wit this boy for life...it has happened with many and is possible....though law does not recognise this arrangement...but then where is the choice.



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Sachchha Payar Nahi hai,

Pahley us ladkey ke shadi hui fir apne wife ke cousine ko mila or payar ho gaya iska matlab saf hai ladka bharosey wala nahi hai. Isay fir koi sunder ladki dekhi to isay ussay payar ho jayaga.
 
manisha ji, pyar vayar kuchh nahin hai ye. this is only attrction. har roj ghar ka shahi paneer khan ki bajaye kabhi kabhi bahar ki chatni bhi achhi lag ja hai. agar ladki aur ladke ne sirf taste ki wajah se kuchh kar liya to koye baat na. par roj roj bhar khane ka man ho to ghar ki rasoi band karne main hi fayda hai. Agar sirf attraction ki wajah se ye sab hai to let them enjoy but that boy / girl should not ignore their responsibiities and duties towards their families. Family first.
 
Ohhhhhhh end le lo.............

Jatland turns into Loveland today ............... hahaaaaaaaaaa
Just hopped between many a views here......... Strange really! Anyway..... if its really an imaginery situation, and has to have a happy end, then the only way out can be an end in which the cousin, prompted by his longingness to live with the new girl he started loving, approches his wife with a mind full of many strange and wierd thoughts and confides in her that he has fallen in "true" love with the said girl, and he just bursts into tears and starts pleading to his wife that please forgive me & tell me the way out........... but I cant imagine my life without her............... he is crying badly........... knelt down looking at the floor............ the voice of this crying is suddenly crushed by a hearty laugh of his wife!(:confused:) He is startled......... looks puzzled at his wife's now glown up face............. she kneels down too & gives a big hug to her husband & says,.......... " Oh dear........XYZ........today is the happiest day of my life........... and now it will be the same for u too(:eek:) ........... I had past many a sleepless nights but couldnt dare to confide to you that I had been deeply in love with your freind ABC......... & my life would have turned to a disaster, had I not got the love of my life.............. "

They party whole night........... party of their SEPARATION...........:D:confused::p
 
Gadar .. Chhori ke baat hai

shwetadhaka said:
Jatland turns into Loveland today ............... hahaaaaaaaaaa
Just hopped between many a views here......... Strange really! Anyway..... if its really an imaginery situation, and has to have a happy end, then the only way out can be an end in which the cousin, prompted by his longingness to live with the new girl he started loving, approches his wife with a mind full of many strange and wierd thoughts and confides in her that he has fallen in "true" love with the said girl, and he just bursts into tears and starts pleading to his wife that please forgive me & tell me the way out........... but I cant imagine my life without her............... he is crying badly........... knelt down looking at the floor............ the voice of this crying is suddenly crushed by a hearty laugh of his wife!(:confused:) He is startled......... looks puzzled at his wife's now glown up face............. she kneels down too & gives a big hug to her husband & says,.......... " Oh dear........XYZ........today is the happiest day of my life........... and now it will be the same for u too(:eek:) ........... I had past many a sleepless nights but couldnt dare to confide to you that I had been deeply in love with your freind ABC......... & my life would have turned to a disaster, had I not got the love of my life.............. "

They party whole night........... party of their SEPARATION...........:D:confused::p
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Yo he chaap dyo ji end .. Hari puttar aali kitab fail ho jaagi
 
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